Shackled by the restraints of your own mind
In the darkness where only shadows dwell
Trying to break the chains so you might find
A freedom of which you are proud to tell
Others are scared to break out of the mold
Their fears lye in the unknown of the light
Where presides things that are worth more than gold
Such as the knowledge of power and might
The journey may be difficult to take
Light may burn and rain may chill to the bone
But the comfort in the cave is but a fake
Only on the outside can freedom be shown
With some help you can make your way out
To find what this world is truly about
FIRST! Ahem... anyway, you have a good rhyming scheme (no one noticed that you had one line missing from the first stanza). It also makes a clear summary of the allegory in general.
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ReplyDeleteI really liked it. :) I absolutely LOVE the third stanza. It holds such deep meaning and the rhyming is very well done. Good job on this, Will!
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These all rhyme very well. Goodjob.
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